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ScottMeehleib — 2012-04-16 11:44:07

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	+ * Looks a lot better now. After re-reading the content without the bullets, the examples don't come across as excessive as I'd thought they'd be. So I'm okay with keeping it as is. Thank you, JW. -SM

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JabberWokky — 2012-04-16 09:06:26

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	+ + * Better? Worse? Trim off the ones that seem excessive? -jw

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ScottMeehleib — 2012-04-15 13:49:18

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- Although all the above is undoubtedly true, it doesn't feel like it's written from a community perspective. Rather, it really tries hard to sell you the idea that you need his services for all these different scenarios IMO. For example, the same thing could be written about some other businesses, but it would still come off too strong. For example, I could say "Billy Bob's hair salon will help you look presentable at Weddings, Funerals, Sales presentations, Student presentations, Doctorate presentations, and Job interviews." One or two examples might be (arguably) okay, but a long bulleted list doesn't feel right, not because it's untrue, but because I don't feel that it embodies of what the community would care to impart.	+ Although all the above is undoubtedly true, it doesn't feel like it's written from a community perspective. Rather, it really tries hard to sell you the idea that you need his services for all these different scenarios IMO. For example, the same thing could be written about some other businesses, but it would still come off too strong. For example, I could say "Billy Bob's hair salon will help you look presentable at Weddings, Funerals, Sales presentations, Student presentations, Doctorate presentations, and Job interviews." One or two examples might be (arguably) okay, but a long bulleted list doesn't feel right, not because it's untrue, but because I don't feel that it embodies what the general Davis community would care to impart.

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ScottMeehleib — 2012-04-15 13:48:22

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- Although all the above is undoubtedly true, it doesn't feel like it's written from a community perspective. Rather, it really tries hard to sell you the idea that you need his services for all these different scenarios IMO. For example, the same thing could be written about some other businesses, but it would still come off too strong. For example, I could say "Billy Bob's hair salon will help you look presentable at Weddings, Funerals, Sales presentations, Student presentations, Doctorate presentations, and Job interviews." One or two examples might be (arguably) okay, but a long bulleted list doesn't feel right.	+ Although all the above is undoubtedly true, it doesn't feel like it's written from a community perspective. Rather, it really tries hard to sell you the idea that you need his services for all these different scenarios IMO. For example, the same thing could be written about some other businesses, but it would still come off too strong. For example, I could say "Billy Bob's hair salon will help you look presentable at Weddings, Funerals, Sales presentations, Student presentations, Doctorate presentations, and Job interviews." One or two examples might be (arguably) okay, but a long bulleted list doesn't feel right, not because it's untrue, but because I don't feel that it embodies of what the community would care to impart.

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ScottMeehleib — 2012-04-15 13:45:17

advertisement or not?

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	+ This page is for discussing the contents of ["Public Speaking Made Easy with John Galiotto"]. + + My personal feeling is that the page uses an excessive amount of bullets and examples which make it come across more like a personal resume rather than a typical, casually-written wiki entry. I'm not sure if Tom Garberson, the one who flagged the entry, shares my reasoning but I just went with my gut. One person has expressed that it doesn't seem like an advertisement at all. What does everyone else think? + + As an example, consider this section: + + "Public speaking training can help you at: + Weddings + Funerals + Sales presentations + Student presentations + Doctorate presentations + Job interviews + Overcoming public speaking phobias" + + Although all the above is undoubtedly true, it doesn't feel like it's written from a community perspective. Rather, it really tries hard to sell you the idea that you need his services for all these different scenarios IMO. For example, the same thing could be written about some other businesses, but it would still come off too strong. For example, I could say "Billy Bob's hair salon will help you look presentable at Weddings, Funerals, Sales presentations, Student presentations, Doctorate presentations, and Job interviews." One or two examples might be (arguably) okay, but a long bulleted list doesn't feel right.